lol I ran a family of 4 off the highway in 2002, off into a ravine lol

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Expert in the political and economic realms, idiot bastard red headed step child when it comes to English syntax.

http://writingcenter.mcc.edu/fragment.pdf

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I got nothing against girls; well. I got nothing against girls wanting to die in the military. But I did then.

You realize it's painful to read shit written this badly right JV? The content of what you are writing about is certainly interesting but the delivery sucks. Marketing tends to win the day I know you are aware of this so the only logical reason I can come up with on why you do it is that you are lazy.

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ohhh daaaaaanggggggggggg

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Nap time for scuter. Ape just deign'd em.

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John knows how to write and he can write extremely well so there's no excuse for butchering the finest language mankind has to offer. The man doesn't even have a JOB (that I know of) ffs so I mean honestly if he wants an audience he can certainly work a little harder on his rough edges.

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Did you just passively aggressively front on jvip for being gamefully unemployed. Tsk, tsk, tsk, tsk

[SkyNigger]

This is an amazing fucking story. And it reads wonderfully; sure it's rough around the edges but I wrote that shit as a steady stream of conscious thought, without a plan.

Nailed it.

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marty, everything Scooter has ever written is still current and relevant. You, on the other hand, have never written anything remotely relevant as you are not remotely relevant.

Here's an idea-why don't you go pout about your miserable life alone someplace and drown away your sorrows into a glass of ice cold Jim Beam. When you're good and drunk come back and tell us all which color fishnet stockings look best on winnie. What color makes her look extra saucy marty?

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Originally Posted by SkyNigger

This is an amazing fucking story. And it reads wonderfully; sure it's rough around the edges but I wrote that shit as a steady stream of conscious thought, without a plan.

Nailed it.

Read it some more (only have time for chunks right now) and you are right, I was overreacting over nothing. Your writing at times is somewhat abstract and it contains a lot of emotion, it's captivating when it's really good. I get annoyed when I feel the writer is insulting the intelligence of the reader but I doubt that has ever been your motive.

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Oh now let's not jump to conclusions